Blog post #4

1) What has the comments others have posted on my blog taught me about my own writing?

When I wrote my paragraph, I usually check whether there are some errors. However, sometimes I couldn't find my error, others comment to my blog and taught me about the error. In case of important paragraph such as Midterm paragraph, we have to send our final draft to our teacher. This comment corrects our mistakes, so our score can get better. In addition, comments sometimes found me a better expression. When I wrote a Midterm paragraph, someone from other class came to my blog and told me a better expression than my sentence. I thought her expression was better and I corrected it and I liked it too.

 

2) What have the comments I have posted on other blogs taught me about writing?

At first, I just wrote about others paragraph topic. For example, if someone wrote about a beauty of Seoul, I expressed empathy or added my opinion about that topic. Recieving others comments on my blog, I thought it is better to check their writing. I knew that the feedback I got is more valuable. In addition, watching others blog, there are many students who wrote their paragraph well. I was inspired by them a lot and realized that I have to upgrade my paragraph more.

 

Class Review

This is my class review for Oct 30th,2015.

Class review EW2-035 from Moonju1

Mid-Term Exam Paragraph

Water: Cheap Medicine

                                                                                                                                                  

                                                                                                                                                   EW2-035

                                                                                                                                                 14010218

                                                                                                                                               Lee Moonju

 Drinking 2 liters of water a day provides health benefits in these ways. First, It clears up our skin. There was a Korean TV program 'miracle of a glass of water' which conducted experiment about observing people who drinks 2 liters of water. It showed the effects of drinking water realistically. According to this program, we can see lots of positive influence of drinking water. Lack of moisture makes our skin get dry. It leads to a result of accelerating aging process. Drinking water provides moisture to our skin, so it helps anti-aging. When we drink water, it makes our body wastes excrete from our body. It prevents skin trouble appearing.  Person who participate in this experiment said that her red face got brighten after she had drunk 2 liters of water. Furthermore, other person who had atopy told that his atopy got better. Second, Drinking water improves our intestine(장) health. If we drink water in the morning before eating breakfast, smooth bowel movement(배변 운동) is available. Drinking water in the morning helps enterokinesia(장 운동) promote. It is also good to people who have constipation(변비). Finally, it can be also helpful to the people who are going on a diet. Water which is drunk before having a meal makes dieter feel full. Dieter will eat less food than usual because of satiety. It prevents overeating and chokes back of appetite. In addition, according to K water, drinking water while exercising helps recovery of muscles nerve and quenching thirst. For these reasons, it is clear that drinking 2 liters of water a day is a good habit.

 

Reference

1)  SBS스페셜 물한잔의 기적. Retrieved from http://blog.naver.com/tamatas/100201363504 on October 16, 2015

2) 건강한 물. Retrieved from http://m.kwater.or.kr/info/sub01/healthPage.do?s_mid=1589 on October 16, 2015 

 

3) image: BASF - 우리가 만드는 화학으로 - 물. Retrieved from http://we-create-chemistry.basf.com/ko/resources-environment-climate/water on October 16, 2015