Water: Cheap Medicine
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Lee Moonju
Drinking 2 liters of water a day
provides health benefits in these ways. First, It clears up our skin. There was a Korean TV program 'miracle of a glass of water' which conducted experiment about observing people who drinks 2 liters of water. It showed the effects of drinking water realistically. According to this program, we can see lots of positive influence of drinking water. Lack of
moisture makes our skin get dry. It leads to a result of accelerating aging
process. Drinking water provides moisture to our skin, so it helps anti-aging.
When we drink water, it makes our body wastes excrete from our body. It prevents skin trouble appearing. Person who participate in this experiment said that her red face got brighten after she had drunk 2 liters of water. Furthermore, other person who had atopy told that his atopy got better. Second, Drinking water
improves our intestine(장) health. If we drink water in
the morning before eating breakfast, smooth bowel movement(배변
운동) is available. Drinking water in the morning
helps enterokinesia(장 운동) promote. It is also good to people who have constipation(변비). Finally, it can be
also helpful to the people who are going on a diet. Water which is drunk before
having a meal makes dieter feel full. Dieter will eat less food than usual because of satiety. It prevents overeating and chokes back of
appetite. In addition, according to K water, drinking water while exercising helps recovery of muscles nerve and quenching thirst. For these reasons, it is clear that drinking 2 liters of water a day
is a good habit.
1) SBS스페셜 물한잔의 기적. Retrieved from http://blog.naver.com/tamatas/100201363504 on October 16, 2015
2) 건강한 물. Retrieved from http://m.kwater.or.kr/info/sub01/healthPage.do?s_mid=1589 on October 16, 2015
3) image: BASF - 우리가 만드는 화학으로 - 물. Retrieved from http://we-create-chemistry.basf.com/ko/resources-environment-climate/water on October 16, 2015
Dear Moonju,
답글삭제I was impressed by your writing, because it reminds me water's importance. Your essay is suitable for this season. Fall is so dry, so my skin is also dry and rough. My mother says "Drink water!! Don't drink coke!! Drink water!!". Yes, she's right. I will drink water everytime, and I will have nice skin.
Have a nice day,
Hyuncheol
Dear. Moon-ju.
답글삭제I read your paragraph very well. Your paragraph is really informative for people. Also it is true that drinking enough water is good for health. I think it is better to fix ‘the water in the morning’ to ‘Drinking water in the morning’ in 6th sentence. I drinks water now after reading your paragraph. Nice Job!
Thanks :)
SY
Dear Moonju,
답글삭제It's an Impressive paragraph and interesting title. I knew that water is great for our health so I drink it more than two liters. Your paragraph has excellent composition, but you didn't add some reasons how water makes our skin tone get bright. It's on the third line. Make a great final draft Moonju.
Have a nice day,
Jeonggeun
Dear Moonju,
답글삭제I like your title~! you compared water to medicine. And I think it fits the feature of water which you mentioned. But, I am not impressed your information. Because, it is a fact that well-known to anyone. So, I recommend you to add other things which can provide more information about the water.
Thanks,
Soyoung
Dear Moon Ju,
답글삭제Although the paragraph about water is easy, I read it so interesting. You want to write about water's health benefits. When we drink 2 liters of water a day, our skin is cleaned, our interstine gets health, and we can diet well. These are so imformative sentence for me. But it's better to add the fact. The fact means expert's opinion and the article. I think you add this, then the paragraph gets more truth.
Your friend,
Byung Yub
Dear Moonju,
답글삭제I agree that drinking water is important. I learn importance of water in an introduction to nutrition last year. After that, I tried to drink water. By the way, why don’t you add the words of an expert? If you do, your paragraph gains more credibility.
Best wishes,
Moon Ji-yeon
Hello Moonju,
답글삭제As you left a comment on my blog, I came to your blog, too. I think your paragraph is very informative because it explains about benefits of water in detail. However, it would be better to provide background evidence by using phrase like ‘According to~’. Also, You'd rather write 'brighter' instead of 'bright' in the fourth sentence of your paragraph. However, you did a nice job.
Thanks,
Hyewon Shin
Dear Moonju,
답글삭제I love your title's expression. It is impressive expression "Water is cheap medicine.". My mom also drink 2 liters of water a day for the last three months. She becomes more healthy and reduces her weight. I'll drink water frequently from today. However, If you add more Scientific articles or detailed graphs, maybe it seems to be better. I hope It was helpful.
Best wishes,
Jaemin